JACKSON CARNES
My favourite place to go is any hockey area. Going to hockey is my favourite place because it really brings the inner me out and it really opens up who I am. Right when I walk through the entrance doors my mood just changes and I get into a good mood. I get to being my personal self when I am in the change room with the boys on my team because it is just a great experience and it is so much fun to hang out with my teammates. The best part of the rink is when you step on the ice, it is the best part because I love skating and playing hockey, from start to finish of the ice time I enjoy every second of it. The reason why I enjoy it so much is because, I never have any problems on the ice and im always learning something new every time I take a step on the ice, so it’s interesting every time. Another thing is that the atmosphere in the rink is so joyful. Another thing is that the competitiveness that they players have are so good and it’s nice that the sport is so competitive.
STRENGTH- PUNCTUATION
IMPROVEMENT- VOCABULARY CHOICE
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